I found you interpretation and extension of the ‘Heart of Darkness’ quote to be rather intriguing. I particularly liked the fact that you created a paragraph with short sentences to co-exist with the rapid scenery that was painted around your main character. Even though it gives no back story to the character it made me want to read on and to read more. In like manner, the connection between the image portraying slavery and the initial reaction of your protagonist gaining new information was something I extremely enjoyed. The final line, “My thoughts were heavy, I had never imagined that this would occur and now I carry a burden which I can longer ignore.” , was a brilliant addition to make the reader feel persuaded to want more.
All in all, you’ve done a really great job!