#6 Peer Review

Hi Victoria,

Wow! I also choose this question and the character but our responses are done in a way which is unique to our writing styles.
With every word and new idea, you bring up it all flows. I really applaud your mention of “Yes she is a product you have manufactured, but she is not a daughter you have loved.”, because for some reason I don’t even think Godfrey Cass sees the damage he has caused in this little girls life and his own by not claiming Eppie as his own. Instead, she’s been yearning to feel that masculine hole inside of her that she finds in Silas Marner.
Your concluding paragraph is structured in a way where you are looking into Godfrey’s mind and forcing him to hear what you’re saying. He has done the wrong thing but he now has to live with the consequences of his actions.
Maybe, you could of adding a picture but I don’t really think it needs one as your words are already so vivid!
You’ve done a fantastic job!!

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#5 Peer Review

Hey Adam,
I really like how unique this blog is! I like the fact that you are being true to your thoughts instead of rambling upon how relevant you previously thought your journey to the art gallery was our studies, shown in the opening line. When you start presenting the idea of Romanticism, I quite enjoyed the emphasis you place on this particular type of art that strays from the traditions, to convey, as you put it, the “cultural movement” of that time period.
I found it so interesting how to close your post you created your own piece of artwork to display what you’ve learned on your venture to the art gallery and how it truly contrasts to Da Vinci’s “The Last Supper”.
You’ve done such a great job! 🙂

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#4 Peer Review

Hi Belle,
I could not believe my eyes when I saw that we had similar views on “Hard Times”. I’ve also always wanted to venture to a place of such wonder and beauty like England. I appreciate that you see Dicken’s writing as words which are purposefully placed to be analysed. For example when you mention, “give them a little more play”, you highlight that child-like innocence in adults wanting children to become workers instead truly having a necessary part of their development such as ‘play’. As well the idea of that the circus is linked to the imaginative part of an individual which needs to encompass both the serious and imaginative sides to a human being. I adore the fact that your image came from Pinterest, some people, i.e. myself really don’t know how to incorporate other forms of social media so it is really refreshing to see the media outlet you’ve chosen. All in all, you’ve done a fantastic job, I can’t fault it!

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#3 Peer Review

Hi Julena, I really like your approach to this creative question. When I read it, it almost reminded me of a television program in the 90’s called “Boy Meets World”, when you wrote, “How experiencing new things will lead us to emotions we’ve never felt before”. The way you have used short and sharp syntax pops out at someone who reads it. It isn’t boring nor too long that someone would get distracted, it is just the right amount. However, for next time maybe expressing or even elaborating on what you mean by “teach us the way of the world.”. If you do that it may open another underlying theme of the book such as lack of experience of the world surrounding young people. As well maybe a photo or a quote even, portraying someone’s disinterest to what Mr Gradgrind is teaching in the class. Overall you’ve done a great job! 🙂

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#2 Peer Review

Hey Brittney,
What a great interpretation of the way Emma reacts to this situation. I love the way you used syntax, in short, sharp sentences to show the immediate reaction of Emma’s subconscious realisation that the man she cares is being loved over by another. When you used the sentence, “How could I be so stupid as to miss that?”, to me, it felt more like a current version of what Emma would have said if she was placed in this time period, so I was really appreciative of the time jump.
Something that I think you could work on is maybe to add more onto the line, “Why am I getting so jealous about this situation? No, no. I love Mr Knightley.”. An additional line or even just one elongated sentence would have made this certain line in your entire paragraph pop out as this is the most important line, it is the moment she realises her deep love for someone she blindsided in this time. Overall, I really enjoyed your take! Well Done! 🙂

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#1 Peer Review

Hi Natalie,
I love the fact that you’ve chosen to write your own take on Matthew’s reply. You’ve brilliantly used the senses in each of the paragraphs to lift a vivid collection of moments that can take place throughout the course of nature. Through your use of the senses, I truly felt that you were drawing nature right in front of my very eyes, also each stanza you present you seems to be teaching the reader about the beauty that comes with unlocking each sense and freely giving oneself to nature. I cannot express enough how much I enjoyed the fact that you didn’t rhyme at all but let the words flow word by word.
Although you highlighted the senses in different colours which really made them stand out even more, you could even add an image to paint the picture of nature that you incredibly showed. All in all fantastic work and I’ll see you in the tutorials! 🙂

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