#7 Peer Review

Hi Brittany! I first would like to commend you on your blog post, it is vibrant and extremely factual. I really enjoyed the fact that you explored two of Patrick White’s writings instead of just sticking with one. In the first paragraph where you spoke of ‘The Prodigal Son’ and how White demonstrates “subverting the status quo and materialism” and bases his novel on the interior life rather than exterior. The second paragraph where you spoke about the “Down in the Dumps” extract that we read in class. Your interpretation of the relationship between Mrs Hogben, Megan and Daise enlightened my own views on the story.

One piece of advice: In the second paragraph you forgot to name the text you were speaking about – “Down in the Dumps”.

Keep up the Great Work!!



#6 Peer Review

Hi Julena! After reading your blog post I understood that less can mean more. You proved that by showing your specific views on the darker side of humanity through war, greed and acceptance. As you discussed what “The Measure” really is you made a valid point when you said,

“I believe “The Measure” by Mary Gilmore is about how even though there is so much power and a want for it in the world it does not matter, it doesn’t compare to or even measure to the fact that everyone is born as one and we should all be equal.”

A small bit of advice: Add a bit more background about the piece of writing you are speaking about. This way your readers understand in a clearer view what you are talking about!

Keep up the great work!!


#5 Peer Review

Hi Saxon,
First may I say that what I read in this entry wasn’t what I was expecting, but it was in a great way! The way you made clear and evident references to Henry Kendall’s “Bellbirds” identified to audience that you have a strong knowledge and have been impacted by this poem! Likewise with Charles Harper’s ‘A Midsummer Noon in the Australian Forest’. Even though I can clearly see that you’ve understood both poems very well, one piece of critism I can give is that if you are making a comparative blog, both of the poems should be spoken about equally.
Overall, the post as an entirety was really informative and the pictures complete it! Keep up the great work!



#4 Peer Review

Hi Gabbie!

The blog that I have just read has allowed me to understand a different side of the poem I have yet to see. I too used this poem for my blog, but I understand your appreciation for the poem when you proclaim, ” I feel it proposes excitement, more specifically an eagerness to truly understand each perspective. The poem grows with each stanza. It’s enticing!”. One form of advice is your presentation. Italics or Bolding headings or subheadings would make the overall appearance of your blog! Overall, it is a great blog, keep up the great work!!!


#3 Peer Review

I truly agree with most of the points that you made in your blog this week. The comparison between Harpur and Kendall is very detailed and most of all I really liked how you broke down both poems and found the similarities as well as the differences that can be found in each. One thing that can be improved on is your repetition of words like “Meanwhile” . But not to worry that can easily be fixed with the use of synonyms, don’t worry I always used to repeat the same words. Overall, this post has to be one of my favourites I’ve read so far, keep up the good work!:)



#2 Peer Review

Your interpretation of Ooderoo Noonuccal’s ‘Aboriginal Charter of Rights’, has made me see something that I couldn’t visualise before. On a positive note the structure, and wording of this blog engaged me to keep reading and I did, I wanted more out of it and that’s why this positive was also a slight negative. It was so good I just wanted to keep going! Keep up the great work and I truly look forward to anymore upcoming Blogs! You truly have grasp a great understanding on the vital importance the Indigenous inhabitance had and their rights being values!